The biggest issue I am seeing with most of these rewrites is that it is TOO in-detail. Star Wars has ALWAYS had very basic explanations of things, and in most cases, uses simple words to convey the message.
With these very expositional lines plus them being AI-generated, I have a feeling it is just going to sound off. I think it is a great area to better explain “Rey Palpatine” in the context of this edit, but we can’t make Kylo sound unnatural by all of the sudden using large words and going on lengthy exposition dumps which is something his character has never done.
That being said… and taking/changing the best from what I have seen so far…
“Rey… wherever you are… you are hard to find.”
“You are hard to get rid of.”
“I pushed you in the desert because I needed to see it… I needed you to see it… who you are. I know the darkness that lives in you, Rey…”
“You’re lying.”
“You were right… your parents were no one… torn over their allegiance to the Sith cult.”
“Don’t!”
“Your barren mother was desperate for a child… she saw one she could save.”
“I don’t want this!”
“She stole you from the Sith!”
“No!”
“But taking you caught Palpatine’s attention.”
(Rey sees the vision of her parents and her abandonment.)
“My Love… be brave.”
“You’ll be safe here… I promise.”
“Come back! Nooo!”
“They paid for your protection… in more than one way.”
“Stop talking.”
“Rey… I learned what happened to them.”
(Cutaway to heroes capture)
“Your parents sought out Luke’s protection, searching the Jakku desert for his allies… but Palpatine’s assassins caught up to them, they wouldn’t say where you were… so he gave the order.”
(Rey sees her parents get killed.)
“So that’s where you are.”
“You know why the Emperor’s always wanted you dead. I’ll come tell you.”
…
“Why did the Emperor come for me? Why did he want to kill a child? Tell me.”
“Because he no longer needed you. With his return, and your escape, his clones became threats to his power. You’re one of his clones. You are a Palpatine.”
“The only reason for your creation was to be one of his vessels. But what Palpatine doesn’t know is that we’ve become a Dyad in the Force, Rey… two that are one. Together we can end him and the Sith, and take his power to forge something new…”
(Removes his helmet)
“You know what you need to do. You know.”
“I know.”
By having Rey’s parents be members of the cult, then have a change of heart and try to save Rey fits great with Rey’s line to Palpatine on Exegol:
“My parents were strong… they saved me from you.”
